Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
These days, some
people
recognize that it is efficient
way to make Add an article
an efficient
advertisement
if we want to make Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
people
buy things. Other
argument is that Change the wording
Another
people
usually don’t care about advertisement
anymore. In Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
this
essay, I will discuss both of
views and Change preposition
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tell
my opinion.
These days there are a lot of digital Verb problem
give
advertisements
around the world, and I think it is extremely successful,
because most Remove the comma
apply
people
see them in
their smartphones Change preposition
on
while
their
using Replace the word
they're
they are
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
For example
, when we use Instagram, there are many advertisements
about clothes, shoes and so on, even they
are other countries’ merchandise. I believe it is useful way because it Correct word choice
if they
takes
not too much cost, and Verb problem
does
great
amount of Add an article
a great
the great
people
who use Instagram will see them. And there
is some research that about 20% of Correct word choice
There
people
who meet
a certain Verb problem
read
advertisement
tend to buy the thing.
On the other hand
, paper advertisements
have been useless already. For instance
, broacher in the newspaper was one of the most useful ways to advertise in the past, but newspaper readers are decreasing nowadays, especially among young people
. the advertisements
in trains are
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have
also
have
been meaningless. Verb problem
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People
always use their smartphones, then
they might not look at advertisements
carefully.
In conclusion, digital advertisements
can influence for
Change preposition
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people
, but paper advertisements
have been
decreased Unnecessary verb
apply
its
effects today. Correct pronoun usage
their
Thus
, I believe it is important for companies and organizations to create advertisements
that meet people
’s lifestyles. If they do this
, advertisement
itself Add an article
the advertisement
is
still have a great impact Verb problem
will
for
Change preposition
on
people
and they will purchase more.Submitted by mayu1022.p on
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