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In some countries, people are having children at later age in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantage outweigh disadvantages?

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It is undeniable that in many parts of the
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 couples do not prefer to have kids in
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 phase of their life. There are numerous causes behind
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 baby planning at
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 age may generate
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 gap, parents get an opportunity to spend a longer time with their children. To commence with, there are various factors which
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people to delay family planning and the prominent one is . The younger couples have
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Complete your essay to ensure full coverage of the topic. Your response ended abruptly without covering all necessary aspects, including complete reasoning and a conclusion.
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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas. Such as transitional phrases, conjunctions, and references. This will make your essay more coherent.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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