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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given table indicates
to
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the number of passengers who
traveled
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travelled
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 by underground train yearly in 6 different cities
include
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 London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto,
Los
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and Los
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 Angeles,
in addition
 to the distance that each train line has passed since they
had
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opended
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opened
.
Overall
,
Londen
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 tube was the oldest underground train which worked from 1863, passing through 394 Kilometers of route and Los Angeles was the youngest line which was built in 2000 and
traveld
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travelled
 for 28 Kilometers since
then
.
According to
 the information
of
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 the
last
 column of the table, Tokyo residents hold the top place
of
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 using
metro
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the metro
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 ( 1927 individuals
in
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each year) and people in Kyoto
used
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 the
less
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 (50
passenger
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passengers
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 per
a
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apply
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year ) among all metropolitans. 1191
french
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French
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 people in Paris chose
metro
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the metro
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 for their
journeies
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journeys
 in 12
month
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months
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 which was followed by the British with 775
traveler
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travelers
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.
Loas
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Los
 Angeles and Washington DC's passengers occupy the
less
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 places
befor
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before
 Kyoto with 50 and 144 individuals, respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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