the table below gives information on consumer spending on differnet items in five different countries in 2002.

the table below gives information on consumer spending on differnet items in five different countries in 2002.
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The diagram illustrates how much people consumed different items in Spain, Ireland, Sweden, and
Turkey
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in 2002.
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,
Turkey
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was the countries got the most remarkable data in total, except for Clothing/footwear.
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, there was a similar proportion between all ones compared, which all five regions
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mostly spent on food/drink/tobacco,
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next to clothing/footwear,
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Leisure education occupied the lowest one. The number of consumption of food/Drink/Tobacco from Ireland and
Turkey
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is the highest data at around 30%, which almost doubled with Italy, Sweden, and Spain at around 15%-18% .
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, the figure for clothing/footwear was seen
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highest in Italy which got exactly 9% in 2002, compared to the remaining countries, which were at about 5%-6%. Over 4% in Leisure/Education from
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, which was roughly 1% higher than Italy and Sweden,
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specifically at 3.20% and 3.22% in that order. And better than 2% with 2.21% and 1.98% from Ireland and Spain respectively.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • significant
  • analysis
  • break down
  • speculate
  • cultural factors
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • comparison and contrast
  • evolve
  • impact
  • economy
  • society
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