IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graph and chart provide information on the daily average maximum and minimum temperatures and the average number of days with rainfall in two cities in Australia

The graph and chart provide information on the daily average maximum and minimum temperatures and the average number of days with rainfall in two cities in Australia
#information #temperatures #rainfall #two #cities #australia
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph provides information about the average
temperatures
Use synonyms
 of two cities on a daily basis. The bar chart indicates the how many
days
Use synonyms
 per month that rain falls in the same cities.
Overall
Linking Words
, the average
temperatures
Use synonyms
 drop in both cities between February and July.
In addition
Linking Words
,
Brisbane
Use synonyms
 generally has more
days
Use synonyms
 with rain, but the figures in
Canberra
Use synonyms
 surpass between June and October. At
first,
Linking Words
the average
temperatures
Use synonyms
 in both places stand at around 27 degrees in January and decline gradually until they reach the lowest levels in July.
Subsequently
Linking Words
, the figures rise to end at the same level as those at the beginning.
However
Linking Words
, the average
temperatures
Use synonyms
 in
Brisbane
Use synonyms
 remain higher than those in
Canberra
Use synonyms
 throughout the year,
while
Linking Words
Canberra
Use synonyms
's have more dramatic changes. The number of
days
Use synonyms
 with rain in
Brisbane
Use synonyms
 fluctuated more drastically throughout the year compared to
Canberra
Use synonyms
, especially between October and May, ranging from 8 to 14
days
Use synonyms
 per month. The figures stay constant at 7
days
Use synonyms
 between June and September.
In contrast
Linking Words
, the numbers for
Canberra
Use synonyms
 seem less versatile, ranging from 7 to 10
days
Use synonyms
 per month.
Canberra
Use synonyms
 has fewer
days
Use synonyms
 with rainfall than
Brisbane
Use synonyms
, except for the period from June to October.
Submitted by thaovuphuong19 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, days, brisbane, canberra with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: