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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #talents #sport #music #child #sports #person #musician
In our rapidly developing and changing contemporary world, part of
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society thinks that people are able to
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 with assured skills,
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example in
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 or music.
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, sometimes any child
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 their skills by
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, and so
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 debate is rather complex,as we shall see. On the one hand, someone who was born with assured skills can develop themselves without any doubt and prove it in competition.
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, it can be visible in our sports world, when some of the athletes show results,
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 their goals and
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 up careers. As it is
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that hard.
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 talents develop not only in these areas, as we can check some painters and designers can prove their natural gifts in their
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.
On the other hand
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 of talent can
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 by
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 and learning new techniques. From the start of their way, it is their ability to
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 more goals and prove their experience. As an example, in
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 if you take more time for your training, you will get new results,
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 collect enormous advantages. It depends
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 wish plus perseverance.
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 both of these views clearly show that people should always give a chance to prove their ability
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and collect their part of
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. Even if someone is better than them, it is
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 chance to show that hard work and experience equal certain talents.
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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