the line graph shows the amount of fastfood consumed by astrutalian teeagaer from 1975 to 2000

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The line graph depicts the

numner

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number

of times per year a teenager

spend

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spends

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in Australia

to eat

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eating

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junkfood

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junk food

from 1975 to 2000.

Overall

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, It can be seen that consumption of

hamburgers

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and pizza increases significantly,

while

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decreases for fish and chips. In

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the

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year 1975, figures for pizza and

hamburgers

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staretd

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started

start

at around 10 times per year.

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popularity

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the popularity

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hamburgers

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inclined

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increased

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swiftly and reached over 80 in 1985, and remained constant after reaching

it's

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its

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peak at 100 in 1995 till 2000. For

hamburgers

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, the

firgures

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figures

figure

grew slightly around 30 in 1985 before inclining drastically to just over 80

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from

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1995 to 2000.

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, The prominent of fish and chips showed

fluctuiations

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fluctuation

first

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the first

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10 years. The number started at 100 in 1975 and fell to

near

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nearly

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80 in

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the next

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five years. After that,

number

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the number

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reached just under 100 in 1985 and again started to decrease

continpusly untill

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continuously until

it reached 39

at the end

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of the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

160 words

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the line graph shows the amount of fastfood consumed by astrutalian teeagaer from 1975 to 2000

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