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This diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

This diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
The diagram depicts the way in which
electricity
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 is produced by a hydroelectric power station.
Overall
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, there are various stages for the generation of
electricity
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 in a hydroelectric power station that
last
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 24 hours.
Initially
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, river
water
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 enters into a high-level
reservoir
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 behind a
dam
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. After that, the
water
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reservoir
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 is discharged through the
dam
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 gates during the day.
Following
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this
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,
water
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 flows to a generator that has been constructed
at the end
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 of the canal. In the generator,
water
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 rotates a reversible turbine that leads to
electricity
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 generation.
Then
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, power lines assist in
electricity
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 distribution nationwide.
This
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 way, people can have easy access to the constant flow of
electricity
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. In the subsequent stage,
water
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 flows to a low-level
reservoir
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. During the night, the reversible turbine in the generator pumps
water
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 into the high-level
reservoir
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 behind the
dam
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. The
dam
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 gates should be closed during the night. The day after,
this
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 cycle will be repeated to produce the needed amount of
electricity
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 for citizens.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water, reservoir, dam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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