Some people think that homework is not necessary for students’ development. Do you agree or disagree?

Homework
is one of the signature
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times in high school. Especially in many Asian countries,
homework
is the most important
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that can not be replaced by any other methods of
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to achieve higher grades.
However
, I personally do not agree that
homework
is necessary for
students
. Finishing
homework
is wasting
time
. Each student has their own aptitude, and they will develop their best if they are allowed to do things they have
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passion
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.
However
, in schools,
students
have to
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numerous subjects, even
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are subjects they totally do not want to
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to spend their
times
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But they have to spend their
time
finishing relevant
excercises
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exercises
.
This
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that they can not explore as much as
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possible
their passion and their potential talents, which narrows down their mind and their interest.
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that, giving
homeworks
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homework
is one of the factors causing stress in
students
.
Students
in high schools, especially in Asian countries, usually spend approximately 6 hours a day
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in class. After that long day of learning, they go back home with numerous exercises which
teacher
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assigns.
Then
they spend all their evening doing
homework
. In
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other words, they have no
time
to entertain, no
time
to talk with their parents
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and no
time
to live their life.
This
results in
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number of
students
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during their high school.
To conclude
, I totally disagree that
students
need
homework
to develop their
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. I believe leaving them free
time
after school is the best way for their development.
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