Some people believe bicycle has lot of advantages whereas others believe bicycle has more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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people who think that
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bicycles
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not useful and we are not encouraged to use them frequently
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others believe
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many advantages. In my point of view,
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is a convenient vehicle. In the following paragraphs, I will provide my opinions of
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of transportation.
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Bicycle
is not effective when moving
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in
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. Nowadays, we have many alternatives to
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for
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such
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as cars and motorbikes for private vehicles or buses and trains for public means of transportation. These kinds of
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not only save us
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of
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moving but
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reduce our efforts.
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,
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of spending energy
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the bike to the office, we can have
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energy in our
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that day.
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,
bicycle
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has many advantages in
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of health and economy. Nowadays, we have seats before the computer for hours a day,
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to the
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our health and the
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potential diseases. But the most difficult
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to consider is that we do not have time to do exercises early in the morning.
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using
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is an effective solution to that problem. Riding a bike burns
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the same amount of calories as walking, which means having to go to the office by bike is a way to do exercises every morning.
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, moving by
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not
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expensive payments so
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it is ideal for anyone who wants to save money for their plans in future.
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, I think using
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is more
benefical
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beneficial
than using other alternatives, both in
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of health and economy.
Governents
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Governments
should release more legal texts that encourage
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citizens
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to use
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rather than vehicles.
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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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