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The graph below shows the number of Internet users in a few countries over a period of 10 years.

The graph below shows the number of Internet users in a few countries over a period of 10 years.
The line graph compares the percentage of how many people who used the
internet
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 in Greece, Denmark and Canada with the world's average use from
1998-to
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1998 to
 2013.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the popularity of
internet
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 usage increased over the years in all countries. The number of people who used the
internet
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 surged swiftly in Denmark and Canada from about 25,000 to 78,000 and 70,000 respectively in 2003. After that , it continued to grow slowly until it reached 95,000 in
Denamark
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Denmark
 and about 85,000 in Canada in 2013. At the same
time
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time,
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 it remained the largest number compared to the other two countries. People in Greece surfed the least amount of
internet
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 from beginning till
ending
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. Data for Greece started at 2,000, which
then
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 grew by 10 fold in
next
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the next
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 five
yeras
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years
 and reached its peak
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 of the period. The Similar trend was seen in the world's average, here data inclined
gardually
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gradually
 from 3,000 to 12,000 in 2003 and 35,000 in 2013.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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