In some cities, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings, so people can build in whatever style they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are few restrictions on the layout and design of new residences and office buildings in some cities, allowing developers to use any architectural style they choose. In my opinion,
this
is more advantages than disadvantages because it will stimulate
creativity
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of
citizen
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and
also
this
will speed up development. The biggest reason why
this
is
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advantages
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is
people
will more opened their ideas and
created
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many
design
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designs
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for
architucture
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architecture
in the city. They do not be
affraid
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afraid
to learn and practice their ideas in the different
mode
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.
it is
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will stimulate and
encourages
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people
for
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make more
prespective
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perspective
to
estabilish
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establish
building
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buildings
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.
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, Manu awardee
enginer
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engineer
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become
make
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their own ideas to
impove
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improve
their city become more
beautifull
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beautiful
because apply
many
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different
creativity
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creatives
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in their house, office and
also
town
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the town
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.
Moreover
,
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will speed up development. Many
people
will
estabilish
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establish
may design of
building
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the building
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. They think to improve many
place
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places
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in their areas because they do not have to concern
a
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alot
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a lot
lot
about
contoled
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controlled
.
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, in
japan
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, if
people
want to build
house
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the house
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they have to
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the system control of
contruct
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construction
from
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goverment
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government
,
it
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and it
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is take
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a long time. so, They decided
living
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to live
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in
apartement
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an apartment
rather than
house
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a house
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.
As a result
, it is important and beneficial if
people
just build
do
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and do
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not waste their time to think about regulation.
To sum up
, Without the many
regulation
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regulations
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of
contructuction
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construction
will puss many creativities from
citizen
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citizens
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and
also
speed up development.
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