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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. write at least 250 words.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Nowadays technology has been
developed
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 rapidly, it's
also
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habit
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habits
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to
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all of people around the world. In the early 2000th the parents used to read
the
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newspapers and
magazine
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magazines
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, but
then
 in 2015
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they
have been reading
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read
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 by phone or laptop.
Although
 many people start reading online,
i
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 don't
totaly
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totally
 agree with the
statemant
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statement
due to
 some factors. Book is the
world
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 key and it has
contribute
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contributed
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 to
improve
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the
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knowledge. Reading by phone or laptop usually
have
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has
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 some
of
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distructions
such
 as
the
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massage
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message
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notification
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notifications
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, advertising, social media and others.
According to
 those
distruction
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destruction
, the convenience of wearing the hard file of
books
are
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 doubtless. For
the
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example reading
the
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physical
books
 means that student will
be focus
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be focused
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 on their learning
istead
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instead
 of their notifications.
In
addition
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addition,
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 some of country haven't
the
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good
facility
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facilities
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 to support online reading
and
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without
books
.
To sum up
, the hard file of
book
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a book
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 wouldn't be
relaced
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replaced
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 by phone or laptop, because it will give us focus, no
distuction
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destruction
distractions
distraction
, without internet and higher facility.
To the
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 fact that, by hard file of
books
student
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students
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 or society could read anywhere and ease.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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