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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.
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The line graph illustrates the
migration
 of individuals from rural to urban in three nations (
Iran
,
Indonesia
 and
Russia
),
along with
 predictions for the year 2025. It can be seen that, over a period of 25 years, there
is
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 a significant increase in
migration
 in
Iran
 and
Russia
,
while
 the number of residents moving to
Indonesia
remains
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 stable for the whole time. Regarding the movement rates of people in
Russia
 and
Iran
, they stood at about 18 and 7
million
 respectively in 2000. There was considerable growth in
Russia
 and took the lead until
Iran
 overcame it in 2020. In the final year, the number of
people’s
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 migrations in
Iran
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reached
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 a peak of almost 100
million
 in 2025, compared with about 90
million
 in
Russia
. In early 2000 the
migration
 rate of
Indonesia
 was 10
million
 which was slightly more than
Iran
’s rate. Having started with 10
million
 in the year 2000,
Indonesia
 could only reach 30
million
 by 2020 demonstrating the lowest rate of internal
migration
 among other countries, namely
Iran
 and
Russia
.
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