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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.
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The line graph illustrates the
migration
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 of individuals from rural to urban in three nations (
Iran
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,
Indonesia
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 and
Russia
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),
along with
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 predictions for the year 2025. It can be seen that, over a period of 25 years, there
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 a significant increase in
migration
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 in
Iran
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 and
Russia
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,
while
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 the number of residents moving to
Indonesia
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remains
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 stable for the whole time. Regarding the movement rates of people in
Russia
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 and
Iran
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, they stood at about 18 and 7
million
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 respectively in 2000. There was considerable growth in
Russia
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 and took the lead until
Iran
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 overcame it in 2020. In the final year, the number of
people’s
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people
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 migrations in
Iran
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reached
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 a peak of almost 100
million
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 in 2025, compared with about 90
million
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 in
Russia
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. In early 2000 the
migration
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 rate of
Indonesia
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 was 10
million
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 which was slightly more than
Iran
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’s rate. Having started with 10
million
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 in the year 2000,
Indonesia
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 could only reach 30
million
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 by 2020 demonstrating the lowest rate of internal
migration
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 among other countries, namely
Iran
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 and
Russia
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words migration, iran, indonesia, russia, million with synonyms.
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