Rich Countries often give money to poorer countries but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than Financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that
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established nations should offer a different type of assistance to the needy countries contrary to financial Remove the comma
apply
support
since the finance rendered does not resolve the poverty issue. This
essay firmly agrees that an alternative method should be used by the
advanced countries. Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
, this
will render direct aid to those in need and secondly
enhances
proper management of funds.
To commence with, rendering Correct subject-verb agreement
enhance
of
the Change preposition
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support
required directly will be of great benefit to disadvantaged individuals as they will receive what they actually need in-order
for them to survive. Correct your spelling
in order
For instance
, non-governmental organizations from developed nations have proven this
strategy work
out well by providing first-hand assistance Change the verb form
works
such
as free Antiretroviral drugs and food to infected citizens. As a result
, availability
of Correct article usage
the availability
this
freely given needs has led to Correct determiner usage
these
well –being
of people affected by Correct your spelling
the well–being
Human
Immuno-deficiency Virus.
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the Human
Additionally
, it will enhance genuine revenue management. It is evident that the government officials have become greedy to the extent that the moment they receive cash to support
their necessitous men and women they instead
channel it to personal advantage such
as enlarging their wealth. For example
, resources borrowed to curb drought in some parts of Kenya never reach the intended users since
To conclude
, wealthy nations should re-strategize on
their assistance to countries in need by not using financial resources for the reasons given above namely: misappropriation of funds and offering Change preposition
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an
indirect Remove the article
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support
required. Therefore
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task achievement
Evaluate the prompt thoroughly and ensure the response is complete. The essay's conclusion is truncated, which affects the overall completeness of the argument. A fully developed conclusion reinforces your stance and summarises the essay effectively.
task achievement
Develop your ideas further. While you provided clear examples, expanding on these with further detail or analysis could enhance the response. For instance, the example of NGOs providing Antiretroviral drugs could be bolstered by discussing the impact this has had on the local population over time.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a consistent structure throughout your essay. Use introductory sentences for each paragraph to outline the main point that will be discussed. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your ideas logically flow from one to the next using transitional phrases or words. This helps in maintaining the logical structure of your essay and improves reader comprehension.
coherence cohesion
Pay close attention to paragraphing. Each main idea should be discussed in its own paragraph to keep the essay organized and make it easier for the reader to identify and understand your points.
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