Rich Countries often give money to poorer countries but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than Financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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established nations should offer a different type of assistance to the needy countries contrary to financial Remove the comma
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proper management of funds.
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required directly will be of great benefit to disadvantaged individuals as they will receive what they actually need Use synonyms
in-order
for them to survive. Correct your spelling
in order
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as free Antiretroviral drugs and food to infected citizens. Linking Words
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the availability
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freely given needs has led to Correct determiner usage
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well –being
of people affected by Correct your spelling
the well–being
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, it will enhance genuine revenue management. It is evident that the government officials have become greedy to the extent that the moment they receive cash to Linking Words
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their necessitous men and women they Use synonyms
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For example
, resources borrowed to curb drought in some parts of Kenya never reach the intended users since
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, wealthy nations should re-strategize Linking Words
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Develop your ideas further. While you provided clear examples, expanding on these with further detail or analysis could enhance the response. For instance, the example of NGOs providing Antiretroviral drugs could be bolstered by discussing the impact this has had on the local population over time.
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