The pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below show the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The first chart displays the major causes of global
land
degradation
. The second graph, how three regions of the world were affected by forest clearance,
over-cultivation
, and over-grazing in the 1990s, is depicted.
Overall
, the root cause
for
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worldwide
land
degradation
was allocated to over-grazing.
Moreover
, Europe had the highest share of farmland
degradation
than other regions.
According to
the first chart, the biggest reason for global
land
degradation
was devoted to over-grazing, which is 35
percent
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.
Additionally
, nearly one-third and 28 % of the world's degraded
land
accounted for forest clearance and
over-cultivation
, respectively,
while
that of other
firm
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accounted for
land
degradation
, which is not clearly specified (7%). The second graph shows Europe had almost a quarter of its
land
degraded, and the main causes of
this
are
due to
deforestation (approximately one in ten
percent
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) and
over-cultivation
(about 8%). Despite the fact that over-grazing played
the
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crucial role in
land
degradation
in Oceania, accounting for 11.3%;
over-cultivation
did not have any impact on the
land
.
In addition
, 3.3% of
land
was destroyed
due to
over- grazing
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in North America, meanwhile the figure for forest clearance stood at 0.2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, over-cultivation with synonyms.
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