In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
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have
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has
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,
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not any
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,
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is
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are
Furthermore
, in the future, there will not be any driver or conductor. Linking Words
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one
side, Correct article usage
the one
this
is really beneficial for our society. Linking Words
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the government
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salary
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going
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a serious
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while
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to
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Firstly
, driverless can be dangerous, and Linking Words
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the consquences
consquences
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consequences
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this
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finish university, they will be unemployed. Verb problem
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serious
problem. Add an article
a serious
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damage
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damages
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driver
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in
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failure
.
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a failure
all
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with all
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the information
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
advantages
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the advantages
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a reality
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