In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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advantages
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increased safety
reduced traffic congestion
improved efficiency
accessibility
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job displacement
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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child's development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most siginificant influence. Discuss both views and opine.

In some countries, owning a home is more important rather than renting one. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Nowadays, parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed what is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation. Such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both points and express your opinion.

Do you think a museum is to educate or entertain people?