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The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. What is the most noticeable difference between the two maps?

The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005. What is the most noticeable difference between the two maps?
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The map
show
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shows
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 how Youngsville in New Zealand changed over a
25- year
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25-year
 period from 1980 to 2005. Generally,
it is clear that
the
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apply
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Youngsville
see
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is seeing
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 major changes. Most noticeably, there are many trees
were
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that were
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 knocked down to way for factories and skyscrapers.
Additionally
, there was a railway was installed in the
north east
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northeast
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 of
this
 city. In
term
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terms
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 of the north, over 25 year period, the area has witnessed big changes
especially
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, especially
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to
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with
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 the arrival of the railroad in the northeast which
were
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was
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 redeveloped. Many trees were cut down to replace
by
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apply
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a park and a car park. In the
north east
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northeast
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, A stadium, car park and railway were constructed where the
resident
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residents
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 houses used to
between
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be between
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 1980 and 2005. Look at the detailed images in the south, the houses and more trees have been profoundly affected over the 2 decades and were replaced by factories and skyscrapers. The school and the airport were still maintained. All of the buildings were erected period from 1980 to 2005. A warehouse was built near the factories.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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