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The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the different stages of development of the honey bee during its life
cycle
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 which takes approximately five weeks. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that there are five primary stages shown in the process, from egg to mature insect.
In addition
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, the complete life
cycle
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 lasts between 34 and 36
days
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. The life period of the honey bee begins when the female adult lays an egg, and it lays one or two eggs every three
days
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. Between 9 and 10
days
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 later, each hatch, and the immature insect, or nymph, appears. During the third stage of the process, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times.
This
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 moulting first takes place 5
days
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 after the egg hatches,
then
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 after one week, and again another 9
days
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 later. Next,after a total of 30 to 31
days
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 from the start of the
cycle
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, the young adult honey bee emerges from its final moulting stage. After 4
days
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, it reaches full maturity and the
cycle
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 starts over again.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cycle, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • laying of eggs
  • queen bee
  • hatch into larvae
  • rapid growth
  • develop into pupae
  • significant transformation
  • emergence of the adult bee
  • matures fully
  • cyclical nature
  • colony’s survival
  • reproduction process
  • subsequent generations
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