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Learning English is important. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
individuals
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 believe that studying
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english
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 is essential throughout our lives. But some of them consider that
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 is not vital for their lives.
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 I completely agree with
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 situation because
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 can make
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money
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, travel around the
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. First of all, if
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 study
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, they can earn
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 can provide lessons for the youth. Alternatively, they can
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 virtual lessons to
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young
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applications,
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 as, Telegram is
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 useful app
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 in the office in order to translate conversations between companies of your country and foreign
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. Because it not only
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people
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money
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assist
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people
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 to travel around the
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Furthermore
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 the
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 who would like to travel around the
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. All of them must discover
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people
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 like their mother tongue. In summary,
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this days
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 learning
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 is very significant throughout our lives. But some
people
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 think
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 is not important. I fully agree with
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 circumstance.
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 is because
the
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individuals
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 can earn
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 and go sightseeing places
of
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the
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another countries
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another country
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 in the
world
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Introduction
You should start your essay with a clearer and more direct statement that presents your opinion on the importance of learning English. It sets a clear direction for your essay.
Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, make sure to directly address the question asked by clearly stating whether you agree or disagree with the statement, and systematically support your view throughout the essay with specific examples and clear reasoning.
Logical Structure
Organize your ideas clearly into paragraphs. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea of the paragraph, followed by explanations, examples, and a concluding sentence if necessary.
Coherence + Cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more effectively, enhancing the overall flow of your essay. This will also make your argumentation clearer and more persuasive.
Grammar and Accuracy
Be mindful of grammatical accuracy and variety in sentence structures. Varied sentence types and correct grammar usage can significantly enhance the readability and professionalism of your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • prerequisite
  • cultural literacy
  • diplomacy
  • globalization
  • innovation
  • cross-cultural communication
  • academic research
  • linguistic barrier
  • job market
  • multinational
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