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The graph line shows radio and television audience throughout the day in 1992.

The graph line shows radio and television audience throughout the day in 1992.
#line #radio #television #audience
The provided graph illustrates the percentage of
number
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a number
the number
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 of people living in
cities
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia
during
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from
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 1970 to 2020. It
also
 exhibits the prediction for the same matter for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, the percentage of the total population who live in
cities
 in all countries
are
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is
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 predicted to
increase
 in 2040, compared to 1970. In 1970, there
was
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were
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 only slightly more than 30% of people living in
cities
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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.
During
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From
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 1970 until 2020,
this
number
 fluctuated and reached its peak in 1990
with
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at
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 almost 50%.
However
, from 2020,
this
number
 is predicted to constantly
increase
 to slightly more than 50% in 2040. The
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 trend is
also
 shown by
population
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the population
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 in Thailand.
Although
 there was no significant
increase
 between 1990 to 2020, the total
number
 of people living in
cities
are
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is
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 expected to grow to about 45% in 2040.
In
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On
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 the other hand, Malaysia and Indonesia are showing similar
trend
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trends
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. In 2040, both countries are predicted to experience a significant
increase
of
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in
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total
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the total
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 population who live in
cities
. There will be a total
increase
by
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of
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 almost 50% and 40%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cities, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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