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While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days professional jobs and other occupational
industry
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industries
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 are considered equally important in various nations. Many individuals debate that practices need to be implemented to increase
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the influx
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 of students towards skill-related
profession
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professions
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 in comparison to regular employment. I believe that
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government should equip pupils with learning for different career options and let the youngsters decide
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career as per their interest. To start with, regular studies
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 students familiar
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at
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 different corporate positions in future. All government allots significant positions to fill every year as
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administrative work as per the requirements.
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, It is crucial to offer classroom knowledge to prepare students to grab these opportunities.
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- As per TOI, the majority of affluent countries demand 45% of aspirants to utilise sitting jobs in different sectors.
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,
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 will help in the
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 development of a nation. At the same time, despite of training crowd for
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 profession, people need to be equally trained to pursue careers in Specific skills. Undoubtedly, incentives and
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 pay are lucrative if a person is equipped with certain skills.
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, for
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 growth , authorities need to equally encourage and arrange enough learning schools to collect qualified skilled workers.
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, training centres for truckers , electricians and other fields help people to learn about these skills.
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, if a country wants to maintain balance in terms of filling vacancies and for
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 betterment, a balance needs to be in place and youth should be equally encouraged to explore skill trade
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 traditional desk setting work

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skilled workers
  • vocational training
  • academic study
  • qualified
  • electricians
  • plumbers
  • technicians
  • hands-on experience
  • job market
  • infrastructure
  • economy
  • unemployment rates
  • consumer spending
  • educational paths
  • job satisfaction
  • societal resilience
  • versatile workforce
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