Some people see sport as no more than a leisure activity, others, however, believe that it is important for society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In recent years sports have become more popular in our society, for some people those are simple hobbies meanwhile others believe in the importance of
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In
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, it is a common opinion that physical activities
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as gym are not on top of their priorities,it is more something you do only if you have time or energy.
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John Smith's research, published in the “Healthy Life” magazine, states that in the USA 1 out of 5 gym members train regularly at the same time in
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the rate is 1 out of 2.
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Dr. Smith compared
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to another research in cardiovascular disease and
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the United States has 65% of the population with
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health problems, in Australia, only 23% has been diagnosed with one of those pathologies.
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On the other side, many young dwellers put training on top of their priorities
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their life around it.
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As a result
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of a survey in WA the number of gyms that are open 24/7 has almost doubled.
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Training has in fact been proven by numerous research, not only the one mentioned above, to be extremely important for our
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, from a small stroll around the park to a full 2 hours gym session.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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if there are many people on the globe convinced that training and staying active is not necessary, is a proven fact
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the key
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a long and healthy life.
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Introduction & Conclusion Development
Develop a more structured introduction and conclusion. Clearly state both perspectives and your opinion in the introduction. Reinforce your standpoint in the conclusion for greater impact.
Balanced Discussion
While discussing both views, ensure you allocate sufficient detail and analysis to each perspective. Your essay tends to focus more on the importance of sport without adequately exploring the view that sees sport merely as a leisure activity.
Use of Linking Words
Improve the clarity and progression of ideas by using a wider range of linking words and phrases. This will enhance the logical flow of your argument and make transitions between sentences smoother.
Grammar & Punctuation
Correct grammatical errors and typos to enhance readability. For instance, 'eaven if' should be 'even if', 'datas' should be 'data'. Pay attention to punctuation and capitalize proper nouns correctly.
Sentence Variety
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