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Band 8.5

One of your friends in a foreign country is starting an import-export business, and he has asked you to recommend a product from your country to him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Say what product you want to recommend to him -Tell him/her where he/she can get this product -Explain why you want to recommend this product

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Dear Jane, I'm excited to hear about the proposed import-export business you are about to venture into.
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, I can boldly say your efforts are paying off, and I would be glad to give some helpful tips based on my experience in Spain. As regards the type of products that I think would be best for your business. An important one is children's smart tablet devices. The Ministry of Education is actively changing primary education systems completely to digital.
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, smart mobile tablet gadgets would be a great market to sell.
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, medical equipment
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 as digital sphygmomanometers are in high demand among the elderly. I am confident you will definitely find a market for them as well. If I would make a recommendation, I think you could order them from China via their online E-commerce stores, and based on my experience, all orders placed shouldn't take more than three weeks before they are delivered.
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, on a few occasions, they might be delayed up to four weeks.
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, you need to understand that I have carefully suggested these products based on the high demand for them and the online statistics published. So, if you would consider them, I believe you would be making good choices for your business. I look forward to hearing from you again. Warm regards, Moses.

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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs by using linking words or phrases.
task achievement
Provide more detailed information on where exactly in China your friend can get the products, perhaps by naming some trusted suppliers.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear greeting and closing, which contributes to its overall coherence.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph presents a single idea, making it easier to follow your thoughts.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and friendly, which suits the informal nature of the communication.
task achievement
You have fully addressed all parts of the task by recommending products, explaining where to get them, and justifying your choices.
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