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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates the information
of
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on
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of migrant
workers
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 in different nations during 2003 and 2006 and the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1000 individuals in 4 countries.
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, the
number
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 of migrant labour
people
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 in all countries increased after 3 years. Noticeably,
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 the figure
of
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 the US was the highest in both years, the opposite was seen in New Zealand. Accounting for 577.000
workers
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, the US was the largest, followed by Australia with 152.000
people
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. The UK was the third in 2003 at 137.000 employees, 71.000 individuals more than New Zealand. In the next 3 years, the UK witnessed a significant growth in the
number
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 of
labours
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, by 151.000
workers
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, surpassing Australia at 219.000
people
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. Similar to the US, which experienced
110.000
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a 110.000
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people
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 rise and still be the highest.
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, the
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in New Zealand was the highest at 21.1, 18,8 more than the US, which was the lowest with only 2.3.
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, the UK consisted of 4.4,
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 figure was one-third of Australia with 10.7.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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