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The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The map illustrates changes which took place in
coastal
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a coastal
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 town, which is
also
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 known as
Petland
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, between the years
of
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1950 and 2007.
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, it is evident that,
Petland
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 used to have an ordinary design with
sea
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the sea
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, industrial area, car
park
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 and grassland which became more sophisticated in terms of entertainment with the facilities of
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a park
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park
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a park
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, swimming pool, apartments, many shops and cinema. On the whole, the sea developed into
yatch
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a yacht
 marine covered by a
half circle
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 road. Another significant change is that
,
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industrial
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the industrial
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 area was demolished and its place
park
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, swimming pool and multi-storey car
park
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 were constructed. Towards the southeast side of the
Petland
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, houses transformed into grassland.
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,
apartment
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apartments
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 and new shops were
builded
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built
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instead
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 of car
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park
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parks
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. In 1950, southwest corner of
Petland
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, there was nothing, and in 2007,
cinema
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cinemas
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 were constructed there.
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, we can observe that
,
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 only roads, which is located in the middle of the map, did not go through any changes (160 words)

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Vocabulary: Replace the words petland, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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