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The civic centre will be planned to change. There are two maps: one is the existing and the other is the plan for new. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and compare the two maps.

The civic centre will be planned to change. There are two maps: one is the existing and the other is the plan for new. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and compare the two maps.
#centre #change #two #maps #plan #information #features
The two maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the changes that need to be made in
civic
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the civic
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centre
. The first map shows the present status of the civic
centre
 and the second map shows the proposed future developments. The overarching plan entails a transformation of
this
 civic
centre
 into an entertainment place including
theatre
Correct article usage
a theatre
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, hotel and restaurant, open
park
, and underground car
park
.
According to
 the second map, the car parking in the upper left
corner
 will be demolished and a theatre will be built in its place. The car
park
 in the right
corner
 will be converted into
hotel
Correct article usage
a hotel
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 and Restaurant. The library will be removed and the exhibition hall will move from the lower left
corner
 to the lower right
corner
. The most notable information involves replacing the existing Council office with
exhibition
Add an article
an exhibition
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 hall. It is planned that
instead
 of
council
Correct article usage
the council
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 office, open
park
Fix the agreement mistake
parking
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 and underground parking will be constructed.
Lastly
, most of the area in
civic
Correct article usage
the civic
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centre
undergo
Wrong verb form
has undergone
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 modification except the concert hall and shopping
centre
. (165 words)
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, park, corner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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