You are studying English at a private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite him/her to the party. In your letter: * explain the reason for the party * give the date and time of the party * suggest what the classmate could bring to the party

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Dear Jass, I hope you are doing well. I’m writing

this

letter to tell you that I’m planning to organize a birthday party for our friend Harjinder as his natal day is on 20th March. As we all are international students living far from our family and we miss our family,

therefore

, it is important to celebrate small occasions together so that we don’t miss our families

as well as

relatives.

Moreover

, it is necessary to make fun and build good relationships between our friends. I plan to deliver the party on 18th March as we all are free because of the holiday and we celebrate at an Italian restaurant as Harjinder likes Italian food.

Furthermore

, all arrangements are made by the restaurant team but our classmates would bring special cakes and gifts for our

friend

Fix the agreement mistake

friends

show examples

. I made

this

plan if you want to add or change something

then

please don’t hesitate to tell me. See you soon in the party. Best Regards, Love

Submitted by tajinder.panag on Wed Mar 13 2024

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task response

For a higher score in task response, ensure you provide more specific details such as the exact location of the Italian restaurant and how your classmate can contribute to the party in a unique way, beyond just cakes and gifts.

coherence cohesion

To improve coherence and cohesion, consider using more transitional phrases and varying your sentence structures to smoothly link ideas and paragraphs together. This makes your letter more engaging and easier to follow.

greeting and closing

While your greeting and closing are politely drafted, adding a personal touch or a note of anticipation towards the event can make them even more effective.

single idea per paragraph

Your paragraphs each cover a single idea, which is good. However, expanding on each point with more detail or examples could enhance clarity and interest.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

164 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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