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More and more plastic wastes are polluting in world cities, countryside and oceans. What are the problems caused by plastic waste? What measures should be taken to solve it?

The increase
of
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plastic
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rubbish
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 is spreading drastically in various environments.The problems
are
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caused by
this
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 issue would be the extinction of
animal
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animals
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 and the negative impact on human
health
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 ,yet it can be solved by
the
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government action which is implementing more
tax
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 on
plastic
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wastes
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waste
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. One of the core
problem
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problems
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for
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of
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 having more
trash
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 in
environment
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the environment
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 would be the
die
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dying
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 out of wild
animal
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animals
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.To be specific,when
rubbish
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was
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is
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 thrown into land or water ,
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will affect
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affects
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on
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animal living
condition
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conditions
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.Those
animal
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animals
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 keep drinking and eating from polluted areas.
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,many diseases will happen
on
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 animals.
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 leads to the drastic
die
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 of
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the animal
an animal
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animal
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animals
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.Take Australia as a prime example,there is a
reseach
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research
 that 30% of wild creatures
was
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died by eating
watses
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waste
wastes
water
 from factories. Another significant issue is the poor
health
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 of
human
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humans
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.In
further
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details
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detail
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,most animals
such
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 as cow or fish which is the main food in human life can eat
plastic
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trash
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.
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, people can accidentally eat
those animal
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that animal
those animals
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 which contain
rubbish
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.
In
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result
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a result
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,
this
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 leads to
the
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 abysmal impact on human
health
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 because of the toxic chemicals in plastics.There is
a
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reseach
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research
of
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from
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 many famous
hospital
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hospitals
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 in the world that 10%
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of patience
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patience
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patients
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had
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have
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 a
long term
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long-term
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 illness because of eating
plastic
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 food. In order to tackle the problem
aboved
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above
,the
authority
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authorities
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 should apply more
tax
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 on
plastic
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wastes
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waste
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.
This
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 is because
,
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people tend to throw
rubbish
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 freely because of the cheap
tax
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 of it.
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, increasing
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tax
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taxes
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 can make residents
hesitating
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hesitate
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 when throwing
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trash
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the trash
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.
As a result
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, the decrease
of
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rubbish
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 will happen because of the awareness of citizens. Taking all points into
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an
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account, the dying out of creatures and the detrimental effects on human
health
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 are the main problems for
plastic
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trash
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.But it can be mitigated by
administration
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the administration
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 applying more
tax
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 on throwing
plastic
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watses
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wastes
waste
water

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