it is difficult for people in cities to get enough physical exercises. what are the causes and solutions?
In
this days
and Change the determiner
this day
these days
ages
. There are many Fix the agreement mistake
age
people
in different metrolopis
who Correct your spelling
metropolis
doesn’t
have enough physical to Correct subject-verb agreement
don’t
train
their body
Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
by
exercises. My essay below will analyze both causes and solutions to solve Change preposition
through
this
problem.
At the outset. People
don’t have enough strength
to train
their body
is attributed to various factors. One
main cause of this
issue is that people
in this
generation are too lazy to get out of their comfortable
zone. Everyone has a television, a computer,Replace the word
comfort
a
smartphone and they always using it, Correct word choice
and a
this
eventually leads to being lazy
and Wrong verb form
laziness
always don’t
Verb problem
not
want
to Wrong verb form
wanting
workout
. If Correct your spelling
work out
people
keep lazy like that they might be overweight or skinny rely
on their diet. Wrong verb form
relying
Furthermore
. People
that
have bad Correct pronoun usage
who
genetics
are unlucky because it made they
hard to gain Verb problem
is
muscle
or strength
to do exercises and it is the main reason their physical
weak. Change the word
physically
Genetics
separate
Wrong verb form
is separated
to
3 types which are ectomorph, mesomorph and endomorph. Change preposition
into
For each
Change preposition
Each
genetics
Replace the word
genetic
had
Wrong verb form
has
their
own advantages but it is important to know which Correct pronoun usage
its
one
you are
because ectomorph will make you Verb problem
have
looking
small but your Change the form of the verb
look
strength
is great and
mesomorph Correct word choice
apply
helped
you build your Wrong verb form
helps
body
much easier and the last
one
helped
you gain Wrong verb form
helps
muscle
but also
lots of fat.
There are a number of viable solutions to help tackle this
problem.
To begin
with, sloth people
that
don’t want to Correct pronoun usage
who
train
their muscle
or Fix the agreement mistake
muscles
strength
but want to on
screen for days by days. It is hard to make Add a missing verb
be on
they
have another point of view at training because they will get bored Correct pronoun usage
them
quit
doing it soon. The only Correct word choice
and quit
way
to solve this
cause is let
Fix the infinitive
to let
they
do it by themselves, Correct pronoun usage
them
one
day they will look at their body
and see how bad their body
or people
talk about they
are too skinny or fat. They will have motivation and trainingRephrase
how they
it
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
In addition
, if people
with bad genetics
want to training
their Change the verb
train
muscle
. It will be much harder for them Fix the agreement mistake
muscles
compare
to normal Change the form of the verb
compared
people
because their first time will be hard because they are so weak it made they do a single push up
Add a hyphen
push-up
way
harder than many people
. The only way
to tackle this
issue is they have to train
their
Correct pronoun usage
them
physical
consistently.
In conclusion, there are two main reasons Change the word
physically
lead to
Verb problem
for
this
. One
is lazy people
. One
is bad genetics
people
, and the only way
to solve this
causes is consistent. They must Correct determiner usage
these
do
exercise every Unnecessary verb
apply
weeks
to avoid Change to a singular noun
week
lazy
and avoid Replace the word
laziness
mid physical
.Add a hyphen
mid-physical
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