Some people believe that radio is the best source to get news while others think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both perspectives and give your opinion with relevant examples?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Some would argue that getting
news
through
radio
is
finest
Change the article
the finest
show examples
way,
while
others say that television serves the purpose in an efficient manner.
Although
walkman
Capitalize word
Walkman
show examples
provides information regarding happenings around the world in handy and cheapest way, I believe that television broadcasts current affairs in an interesting manner with both audio and video. On the
one
hand, some individuals argue that
radio
Correct article usage
the radio
show examples
is
one
of the best means of listening to
news
Add an article
the news
show examples
as
one
can carry it
while
walking or going
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
shopping and even the poorest person can afford it. To purchase a
walkman
Capitalize word
Walkman
show examples
one
does not need
huge
Add an article
a huge
show examples
amount of money and it saves individuals' time because it allows them to listen
news
while
doing any work.
For example
, a recent survey in the USA revealed that
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
show examples
of
persons
Replace the word
people
show examples
prefer to use
radio
Correct article usage
the radio
show examples
as they have
hectic
Add an article
a hectic
show examples
schedule
Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
show examples
so
radio
Correct article usage
the radio
show examples
provides them flexibility.
However
,
radio
only broadcasts
news
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
audio form which sometimes
lessen
Change the verb form
lessens
show examples
their interest.
On the other hand
, some individuals believe that TV provides current happenings with audio
as well as
visuals.
This
Correct determiner usage
These
show examples
audio-visuals
Correct your spelling
audio-visual
show examples
aids
facilitates
Change the verb form
facilitate
show examples
viewers to watch
news
with
videoes
Replace the word
videos
show examples
and pictures which
also
captivates their interests.
on
Capitalize word
On
show examples
the contrary, hearing without watching can be monotonous like transceivers.Not only it
shares
Wrong verb form
share
show examples
vital information from corners of the world but
also
one
can visualize
them
Correct pronoun usage
it
show examples
.
Besides
, if someone practices both tasks altogether, it will retain
news
or data in the brain for
along
Correct your spelling
a long
show examples
time.
For example
, a TV will broadcast
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
live footage of
a
Change the article
an
show examples
event.
This
demonstrates that graphics converts boring
news
into
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
fascinating
one
. In
conculsion
Correct your spelling
conclusion
,
although
listening to
news
Add an article
the news
show examples
on
radio
Correct article usage
the radio
show examples
serve
Correct subject-verb agreement
serves
show examples
as a convenient mode in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
form of easy to carry and use, I firmly believe that television is by the far most effective means of staying in touch with happenings.
Submitted by Kirandeepkaur on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion. Try to make transitions between paragraphs smoother.
Coherence & Cohesion
Introduce your essay topic and outline your main points in the introduction. Summarize your argument in the conclusion, ensuring it reflects the discussion in the body paragraphs.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop your main points with sufficient support. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, followed by relevant examples or explanations.
Task Achievement
Make sure to fully respond to all parts of the question. Present a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples.
Task Achievement
Ensure your ideas are clear and comprehensive. Avoid overly complex or irrelevant information that can confuse the reader.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to strengthen your arguments. More detailed and relevant examples can help illustrate your points more effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: