The chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar chart illustrates the outcomes of a survey about individual

coffee

and tea buying and drinking habits in Sydney,

Melbourne

, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.

Overall

, the highest rate in

Melbourne

was of those going to a café for

coffee

and tea,

whereas

the lowest rate was of those having fresh

coffee

in Brisbane.

On the other hand

, people going to café increased sharply in Hobart,

while

the rate of those having fresh

coffee

decreased significantly in the same city. Looking at the details,

although

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the

ratio

of people visiting a café was the highest one in

Melbourne

, at approximately 63%,

whereas

the

ratio

of those having fresh

coffee

was the lowest one in

Melbourne

, at nearly 43%.

On the other hand

, the percentage of those having

instant

coffee

was about 48%. After a modest drop in the

ratio

of those buying fresh

coffee

, the buying fresh

coffee

proportion decreased sharply

while

the

instant

coffee

jumped gradually from nearly 48% to 53% in

Melbourne

and Brisbane. Looking at more details, Can see that the percentage of those having

instant

coffee

was almost 46 per cent in Sydney .

On the contrary

, the percentage of those having fresh

coffee

was almost 34% in Adelaide.

In addition

to that, the

ratio

of people having

instant

coffee

was exactly 50 per cent in Adelaide.

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221 words

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Clear and correct grammar

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