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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie chart given illustrates a number of things Anthropology graduation students did after completing their studies in
this
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 field. The table below
also
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 depicts their income after five years of working as a freelance consultant in, the government sector, and in private companies.
Overall
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, it is noticeable from the chart that more than half of the students got a chance to find a full-time job. The table,
furthermore
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, shows that the highest-paid career for
this
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 field is in the government sector, with most of them making over 100,000$ after five years of
work
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.
To begin
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 with, more than half of the number of graduates found a full-time job,
as well as
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 15% with part-time
work
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.
However
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, unfortunately, 12% were unemployed. The least amount of them with 5 percent working part-time
while
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 studying for their post-graduate. The table,
on the other hand
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, depicts that the ones who chose to
work
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 in the government sector made the most money of all, with half of them making more than 100,00$ with five years of experience.
While
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 30% of workers who
work
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 for a Private company, had made the same amount of money.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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