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the two maps below show a park as it is today and planned changes that will be completed in 2020 summarize the information

the two maps below show a park as it is today and planned changes that will be completed in 2020 summarize the information
#two #maps #show #park #changes #information
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The given map illustrates how Science
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park
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Park
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 has changed between two different periods of
science
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Science
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Park
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 2003 and today.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 at present science
park
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 has numerous
development
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developments
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 than
old
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an old
the old
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park
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. In detail, on the north-west side,
grass land
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grassland
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 was situated but it was converted into research and development.
In
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On
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 the north-east
side
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side,
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 reception was located under the office building,
then
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 it
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 used as
university
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the university
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 hub. To the west of
new
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the new
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 cycle path is situated
at
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apply
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now but it was empty in 2008. IT
center
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centre
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 was replaced by innovation centre on the South-west. To the east, there
were
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was
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 plenty of grassland but it was removed
along with
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 two trees, that place is used for new road and ather security was enlarged,
in contrast
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,
car
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the car
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park
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 was
shrinked
Correct your spelling
shrunk
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 by size. To the
north- east
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northeast
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, there
were
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was
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 new cycle
path
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paths
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 opened
as well as
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 under the cycle path,
bus
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a bus
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 stop was introduced.
South-east
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The south-east
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 corner and south-west Corner
was
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were
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 merged by
middle
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the middle
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 station was constructed.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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