A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter •Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team. •Summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts. •Say how you think the company should spend the money.
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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to let you know about my feedback regarding your grant for a children's sports team or musical events.
On the one hand, If a sports team is granted for two years,
this
will help youngsters to purchase state-of-the-art tools Ultimately they will not only indulge themselves in physical activities but also
deter themselves from evils like drugs and gangs which will improve their physical and mental well-being.
On the other hand
, the community will enjoy the cultural events provided someone sponspors
them as not everybody can afford to arrange these programmes. Correct your spelling
sponsors
First,
this
will enable the society to socialise with each other because these days people are very busy in their lives. Then
, they can unwind their mind and connect with culture which otherwise
is not possible due to
the professional workloads.
From my perspective, investing in minor sports teams endures for a long since it will enable them to get rid of financial concerns and foster their sporting skills.
Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Haris KhanSubmitted by Haris Khan on
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Task Response: You've provided a balanced view covering both options, but the letter could benefit from providing more detailed examples and a stronger personal recommendation to make a stronger argument.
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For an improved grade, expand your reasons with more detailed examples or personal anecdotes that show a clear linkage between your recommendations and their impact. Also, a brief conclusion summarizing your views could enhance your task response score.
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Greeting and Closing: Maintain formal language consistently in both the opening and closing of your letter to ensure it aligns with the formal tone of the letter type.