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the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison. write at least 150 words.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison. write at least 150 words.
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The given line graph illustrates how much quantities of goods were transported by four ways namely
Road
, Water, Rail, and
pipeline
 in the UK, over the period of from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
,
it is clear that
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the Road
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Road
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Roadway
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way
 of
transportation
 was the most popular than any other
methods
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method
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.
While
Pipeline
 was the least popular. In detail,
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the Road
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Road
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Roadway
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way
 of
transportation
 was situated at around 70
million
tonnes
 meanwhile
pipeline
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the pipeline
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 had only almost 2
million
tonnes
 in 1974.
Road
methods
 increased Significantly from the beginning of the
year
 to
end
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the end
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 of the
year
, between 70 to near go
million
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a million
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tonnes
-
water
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waterway
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way
 of goods
transportation
 had almost 39
million
tonnes
 meanwhile Rail ways had
at
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apply
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40
million
tonnes
then
 these two
methods
 were touched in the following
year
, which was 40
million
tonnes
. There
afters
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after
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water
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waterway
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way
 rose slightly,
at
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to
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 around 59
million
tonnes
 in 1982, after that, it
was remain
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remained
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 unchanged from 1982 to1994, which accounts for 59
million
tonnes
,
then
 it decreased slightly by 50
million
 and there was a rapid increase in 2002, and reached almost 62
million
tonnes
.
On the contrary
, Rail
methods
 of
transportation
 had a fluctuation between 1978 and 200 and it
was
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apply
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reached
at the end
 of the
year
 40
million
tonnes
.
Pipeline
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The pipeline
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 was the least
way
 of
transportation
, from 1974 to 2002, there was a stable fluctuation, between 2
millions
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million
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 to 20
million
tonnes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, pipeline, way, transportation, methods, million, tonnes, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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