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the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison.

the graph below shows the quantities of goods tansported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport. summarize the information, and make a comp arison.
The given line graph illustrates how much quantities of goods were transported by four ways namely
Road
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, Water, Rail, and
pipeline
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 in the UK, over the period of from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the Road
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Road
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Roadway
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way
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 of
transportation
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 was the most popular than any other
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methods
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method
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.
While
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Pipeline
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 was the least popular. In detail,
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the Road
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Road
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Roadway
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way
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 of
transportation
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 was situated at around 70
million
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tonnes
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 meanwhile
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pipeline
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the pipeline
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 had only almost 2
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974.
Road
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methods
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 increased Significantly from the beginning of the
year
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 to
end
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the end
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 of the
year
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, between 70 to near go
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million
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a million
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tonnes
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-
water
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waterway
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way
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 of goods
transportation
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 had almost 39
million
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tonnes
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 meanwhile Rail ways had
at
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apply
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40
million
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tonnes
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then
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 these two
methods
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 were touched in the following
year
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, which was 40
million
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tonnes
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. There
afters
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after
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water
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waterway
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way
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 rose slightly,
at
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to
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 around 59
million
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tonnes
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 in 1982, after that, it
was remain
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remained
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 unchanged from 1982 to1994, which accounts for 59
million
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tonnes
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,
then
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 it decreased slightly by 50
million
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 and there was a rapid increase in 2002, and reached almost 62
million
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tonnes
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.
On the contrary
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, Rail
methods
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 of
transportation
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 had a fluctuation between 1978 and 200 and it
was
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apply
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reached
at the end
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 of the
year
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 40
million
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tonnes
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.
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Pipeline
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The pipeline
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 was the least
way
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 of
transportation
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, from 1974 to 2002, there was a stable fluctuation, between 2
millions
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million
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 to 20
million
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tonnes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, pipeline, way, transportation, methods, million, tonnes, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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