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The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#centre #plan #information #features #comparisons
The two given maps present a current civic centre and its future plan.
Overall
, there
are
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will be
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 more
hosipitality
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hospitality
place
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places
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 in the future which will attract more citizens and tourists visit. It is
sigficant
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significant
shown, two
car
park
 area which on north-eastern and north-western will change to cafe and hotel. And
new
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the new
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car
park
 will situate
at
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apply
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underground
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the underground
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of
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in
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town
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the town
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 hall. Council offices will
locate
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be located
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 closer
high
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to high
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street
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streets
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 than before.
Also
,
library
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the library
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 will move from the corner of
south-eastern
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the south-eastern
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 to the area between council offices and town hall. And the origin area of
current
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the current
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liabary
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library
 will be arranged
to
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for
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exhibition
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the exhibition
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. In conclusion, the new plan
of
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for
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civic
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the civic
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 centre looks more
chamming
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challenging
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 and convenient for people who live there. There is a restaurant which will be in the new hotel. The only
one
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apply
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thing
needs
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that needs
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 to
consider
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be considered
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 is two
car
park
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parks
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 become
to
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apply
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one underground
car
park
, it may cause
no
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not
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 enough space for parking cars.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Civic centre
  • Present
  • Plan
  • Comparison
  • Main features
  • Map
  • Summarize
  • Information
  • Report
  • Relevant
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