The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 – 2000.

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 – 2000.
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displayed
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how the
birth
rates of 2 countries namely China
,
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and, USA
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USA
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the USA
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changed in 80 years which started
from
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1920.
Overall
, the
birth
rate
of
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the US was higher than that of China in most years . It can
also
be seen that these rates of both nations experienced a decrease over the period. China’s
birth
rate rose from around 10% in the 1920s to 15% in 1935.
Then
it fell sharply to around 5% in both 1940 and 1945. It increased rapidly to a peak of 20% in 1950.
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this
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it fell dramatically to less than 10% in 1955.
Finally
, it
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steadily to about 2% in 1980 and remained at
this
level until 2000.
On the other hand
, the US
birth
rate fluctuated at around 12% from 1920 to 1940. It decreased dramatically to under 5% in 1945.
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it increased rapidly to a peak of about 15% in 1950. After 1950, it fell gradually to about 12% in the 1960s and around 7% or 8% during the
last
20 years of
this
period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographics
  • population control policy
  • One-Child Policy
  • Baby Boom
  • fertility rate
  • census data
  • fluctuations
  • societal norms
  • economic prosperity
  • Great Leap Forward
  • family planning
  • contraception
  • workforce participation
  • aging population
  • urbanization
  • trend analysis
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