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In ancient times, major population thrived in a small communities where everyone knew each other. In these days, most of the people live in urban areas such as capital cities and are not much aware of other people around them. What were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small communities?

In the past, most of the population was struggling to
lived
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 in
a
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small sburbs or villages where all were connected with
eachother
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each other
,
whereas
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 contemporarily most of the public
is
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intended to live in developed
region
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regions
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 of
countires
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countries
 where even they do not know about
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 existence around them
due to
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 busy and competitive life. In
this
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both pros and cons of living in small communities with pertinent examples will be discussed in detail.
To
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 the beneficial perspective, there are innumerable advantages of living in small towns or
sburbs
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suburbs
 in the sense of harmony, unity and strong connection with each other. To be more precise, people who
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live
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lives
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live
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 in small villages or societies are more interlinked and aware
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about
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of
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 other members of
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the community
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community
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the community
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 in their ups and downs. A
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due to
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 the residential proximity, and habitually
humanitarion
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humanitarian
 services, we see in the rural areas people are
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 of hospitality. They always show their welcoming gestures, whenever someone enters
into
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their small home. They
has
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the
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 knack for engaging and helping others in need.
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Furthermore
, they do not rely on other means to unwind their mind as compared to those member who
lived
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 in cities and completely hinges on other
activites
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activities
 to mitigate their
stresses
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such
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join
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the
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fitness clubs,
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and spend
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spend
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 time on social media.
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, in regard
of
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to
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negative
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 aspects of living in small communities there few
challanges
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challenges
, which are faced by the community inhabitants.
Firslty
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Firstly
, there are no
provision
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provisions
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of
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for
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 hospitals, poor education and
commute
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a commute
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 system. A
pramont
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paramount
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with
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 serious
choronic
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chronic
 diseases or someone in need of urgent surgery they have to go to cities to reach there they will
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travel long miles away.
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, young nation has no productive future in small
communites
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communities
 because of
lack
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a lack
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 of facilities.
To conclude
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, people who are spending
theri
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their
 lives in small
communites
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communities
 are less
stress
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stressed
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 and interconnected with
eacother
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each other
another
. They know the significant values of life.
However
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, sometimes they pass through many obstacles in some phases of life. Here the benefits of staying in small
communites
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communities
 outweigh the
disadvnatages
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disadvantages
.

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coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words effectively (e.g., 'however', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') but avoid overusing them or using them inaccurately.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task, ensuring you discuss both the advantages and disadvantages with equal depth and detail.
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Incorporate specific examples to support your claims. Choose examples that are relevant and illustrate your point effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Sense of community
  • - Belonging
  • - Support networks
  • - Crime rates
  • - Social cohesion
  • - Access to nature
  • - Open spaces
  • - Traffic
  • - Pollution
  • - Cost of living
  • - Decision-making
  • - Problem-solving
  • - Job opportunities
  • - Diversity
  • - Cultural experiences
  • - Privacy concerns
  • - Gossip
  • - Modern amenities
  • - Services
  • - Social pressure
  • - Expectation to conform
  • - Educational facilities
  • - Healthcare facilities
  • - Personal growth
  • - Development
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