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Some people say that only reason for learning a foreign languange is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign languange. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People
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 have different sides when they are trying to master a new
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 for specific
reason
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. Some
people
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 think that
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 attempt is useful only when they use it for job or travel purposes abroad. Others,
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, disagree
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this
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 specific statement because more reasonable purposes are available to be discussed. In
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 essay, I will look at both arguments and will give my opinion about them. There are some reasons why
people
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 might think
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is only practical when they are travelling or having
job
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a job
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on
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in
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 another country. It is obvious that many common international languages
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 required before someone can apply for a job abroad. If they are not
mastery
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 at it, they may fail to pass the selection,
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 they have enough skills in
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another requirement
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. International
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companies
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,
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, are sensitive
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English
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the English
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language
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, especially in communication, so they often consider which candidates in a talent selection are good at English speech.
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, in terms of travelling,
people
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 may not enjoy enough to experience many tourist attractions abroad if they are not willing to learn simple terms of
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the destination’s
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 lingua.
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, some embassies require
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test
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 for their visa applicants to make sure that
people
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 are eligible to visit their country.
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, another group of
people
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 may have different opinions
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about learning
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 a foreign
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.
First,
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language
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 is a ticket for
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 to unlock foreign culture.
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,
people
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 will enjoy
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learning
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 how another country amused us with their music, food, movies, and so on. Based on
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 reason, many youngsters outside South Korea today learn
Korean
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the Korean
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language
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, so they can enjoy K-Dramas, K-Musics, and
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adorable celebrities more than they do. Another reason for
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 is learning a new
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 can improve our communication.
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, many modern parents send their children to foreign
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course
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courses
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 to improve the children’s speech. In conclusion,
although
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people
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 split their opinions about learning a new
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, all of
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 reasons behind them
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are
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 reasonable.
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, I believe that it is better to improve our communication with another
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 we can pick than do nothing.
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Task Achievement
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