The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The provided map illustrates the two different places where the new supermarket will be located in Garlsdon. In general, it is obvious that the location of the S1 area is in the countryside,
whereas
the S2 will be located in the middle of the town.
First of all, the location of S1 was in the northwest, which is located outside of the town centre, surrounded by countryside. Even in the countryside, there were covered by transportation facilities, which were the railway and main roads and away from Hindon for 12 KM.
Secondly
, the S2 was in the middle of the town contained all the transportation routes, and was covered by the industries. Moreover
, there was a household area on top and bottom of the S2 place. Which was far from Bransdon 16 Km that contains 15,000 people and another village which witnessed over 29,000 residents far from 25 Km, Cransdon.Submitted by piasnatcha09 on
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