The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
diagram illustrates how a
sugar
cane will be converted into
sugar
by going through a process with a number of stages.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
this
conversion consists of seven levels starting from the plant and eventually to the daily usage of
sugar
. Starting off with the
sugar
canes that will take 12 to 18 months to fully grow. After that, farmers will use some special tools in order to cut down the plants, or in some cases, some specific machines will do the work and take off the parts that are not needed. In the third step, parts of the harvested plant will be crushed and made into juice, which will be purified using a specific filter.
Furthermore
, the juice will become syrup, using the evaporators that need to be heated in order to make
this
work properly. In the sixth step, the syrup will cool down
this
syrup and separate the
sugar
crystals from it.
Finally
, the final product will be ready for daily usage in everyday life as a source of sweetener.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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