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The table and bar chart give information about how and where 1600 students in Australia used their computers from 2001 to 2002.

The table and bar chart give information about how and where 1600 students in Australia used their computers from 2001 to 2002.
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The table and bar chart give information about how and where 1600
students
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 in Australia used their
computers
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 from 2001 to 2002. In general, there was a significant increase in the use of online facilities for submitting homework via the
Internet
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 and the
students
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 mainly used
computers
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 at home. In 2001, 1038
students
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,
accounted
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accounting
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 for about 65% of the total of 1600
students
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 who participated in the survey, used the
Internet
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.
However
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, assignments submitted via the
Internet
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 comprised just 20%. By 2002, the number of
students
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 who used the
Internet
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 skyrocketed to 96%,
while
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 the number of
students
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 sent exercise by the
Internet
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 increased nearly 5 times to 1568
students
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. As can be seen from the graph, there was a significant rise in the number of people who used their
computers
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 at home, from 800 in 2001 to 1200 in 2002.
By contrast
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, the use of
computers
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 at universities slightly decreased from 400 to 50 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, computers, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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