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The table gives information about Underground Railroad networks in six big cities regarding when they were opened, the size and the number of users annually

The table gives information about Underground Railroad networks in six big cities regarding when they were opened, the size and the number of users annually
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The given table shows data about when underground
railroad
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 networks opened in Big Six countries regarding their
number
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 of
passengers
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 per
year
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 and the size of routes throughout the given period. It is clear from the graph that , the
number
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 highest of
passengers
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 was seen in Tokyo city in 1927.
while
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 the least
number
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 of travellers was seen in Kyoto in 1981.
According to
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 what is shown, In 1863, the first underground
railroad
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 station was constructed in London. The path of the
railroad
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 was 394 kilometers and the
number
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 of average
passengers
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 traveled by the railway was 775
million
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 which is the third position of the table list. After 27 years, the second Underground
railroad
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 network was built in Paris with 199 kilometres of route. And 1927
million
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 people travelled per
year
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that,In 1981 and 2001, the shortest routes were made in Kyoto(11) and Los Angeles(28) with 45 and 50
million
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passengers
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 per
year
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 respectively. Washington DC came fourth position with 144
million
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 public per
year
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railroad, number, passengers, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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