Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?
These days, the advancement of
technology
contributes to the change of
how Change preposition
in
people
interact with each other. These changes can be seen in many forms and I completely believe that they move towards a better improvement.
Firstly
, modern technology
has a significant impact on the way people
communicate with each other. Today, people
do not have to do face-to-face communication
if they want to attend a course or to
foster a meeting because now it can be held via video conference. Fix the infinitive
apply
Moreover
, group works
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work
also
can be done by a cloud-sharing system so for example
, if students have a team project they do not have to endure a long trip anymore because they can do it with their own devices from the comfort of their places.
Furthermore
, all the alterations technology
made in the way people
interact with each other have made communication
not only convenient,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
faster. For instance
, today with emails or instant messaging, it only takes seconds to deliver a large-size
file to another part of the world. Correct your spelling
large
This
means work can be run more efficiently and productive
. Change the word
productively
Moreover
, these development
enable broader Fix the agreement mistake
developments
communication
as now it only takes a smartphone and a wifi connection if we want to talk with someone overseas.
In conclusion, technology
plays an essential role in many human interactions as now they do not have to appear in physical presence to talk or work with each other. Therefore
, I believe that these improvements gain
many positive Verb problem
have
impact
since technologies are able to make Change to a plural noun
impacts
communication
effortless and broader.Submitted by raymond.sebastianvl on
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