Write about the following topic: Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people? Give reasons for your answer.

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part of the newspapers.
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issue whether publisher
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not only their general life but
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print their personal lifestyle. Even though some people think that it is destructive for the public, I
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folks since they know about their favourite person's lifestyle
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure to fully address the essay prompt by providing a clear opinion and supporting it with specific reasons and examples. Expand your essay to cover all aspects of the prompt, including discussing the appropriateness of sharing private information about famous people.
Coherence & Cohesion
Aim for a logical flow of ideas by organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point. Use connecting words to better link your sentences and paragraphs, enhancing the coherence of your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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