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The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.

The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.
The table compares twelve different areas in the United Kingdom in terms of the number of people cycling to work in 2001, in 2011 and the percentage of change.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the different zones where there are more of them are "
lnner
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Inner
London
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" and "Outer
London
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"
and
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 the two areas that assisted a massive evolution are "
lnner
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Inner
London
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" and "Brighton and Hove". The area where most people cycle to work in 2001 and 2011 mixed up is clearly the British capital
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, counting
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counting
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including
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 the city
center
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 and the
outer
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 of the city. In 2001 ,they were respectively at 43,494 and 33,836.
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,we can observe a massive evolution between the first years of the 2000s and the second decade in the city
center
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 of
London
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 and in "Brighton and Hove". Brighton and Hove had a change of 109
percent
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which
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 means two times more
and
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London
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 had 144
percent
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which
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, which
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 is enormous.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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