The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter •Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly. •Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours. •Suggest what should be done about the problem.
Dear Mr Shoaib,
I am writing to let you know about our organisation's feedback regarding a recent meeting held at the "Green Valley Hotel" on March 16, 2024.
To commence with, the hall was spacious with minimal decorations, seats were cosy, and a large screen was available for presentation which helped us to conduct our meeting effectively.
Moreover
, the participants received an overwhelming response by
the staff whenever something was ordered, it was provided at the earliest.
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from
However
, the workforce struggled a lot because of the limited refreshment options as only a few meat dishes were served due to
which vegetarians did not get a chance to eat their favourite food.
Hence
, would you kindly share and confirm the menu at the time of placing an order? I recommend this
as both the client and hotel will be aware of the dishes which will help to avoid any inconvenience.
Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest.
Yours sincerely,
Haris KhanSubmitted by Haris Khan on
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Task Achievement
Make sure your letter covers all aspects of the task. In this case, while you did mention the feedback on a meeting, the request for confirming menus seems slightly abrupt. Consider introducing the problem more gradually and expanding on the implication for a more complete response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use varied sentence structures and connectors to improve the flow of information. While you have a good use of paragraphs, adding more transitional phrases could enhance the readability and coherence.
Greeting and Closing
Ensure the greeting and closing are appropriate for the context. You did this well, but remember to tailor them specifically to the situation and recipient for an even better impression.