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many people think that the world should speak one language, others argue that countries should have its own languages. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #world #language #countries #languages
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is widely believe
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 that people should
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 one
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 to speak at each
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. Even though nowadays there are having a different
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mother-tongue
 languages to speak in their countries. These ideas will be explained in the following paragraph.
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the origin of people is having their own
language
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.If everyone
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use
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 the same
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, the
barrier
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 of languages will be broken.
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, the difficulty
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 learning
new
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language
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 is over.Some jobs will gone without
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.
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, diplomat is one of the occupations ,
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use
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language
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skill
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 for work, will not need anymore.
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,
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 different cultures
are
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 hard to understand
eachother
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each other
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same
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language
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 will be the tool to
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communicate
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to
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get rid of the
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. Second,most
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elders usually
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 to keep the
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old cultures including
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.The gorgeous of languages is built up with
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delicate meat
. In China, they do not
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 any alphabets but they
use
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 the picture to write
instead
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.
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words
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 which
mean
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 human in Chinese
are
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 comprised
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 a stickman picture.
On the other hand
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 ,
this
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 idea causes a
barrier
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communicate
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 with
other
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others
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.If everyone can communicate
at
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 each other, they will exchange
idea
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ideas
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 and
relationship
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relationships
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 between them. In my opinion, people should
use
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 only one
lanuguagu
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language
 because of
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the convenient
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convenient
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 and destruction
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barrier
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Coherence & Cohesion
Improve the structure of your essay by clearly dividing it into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and follows logically from one to the next.
Coherence & Cohesion
In the introduction, clearly paraphrase the question and state your opinion. In the conclusion, summarize your main points and reiterate your opinion clearly and decisively.
Task Achievement
Support your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. Use specific, real-world examples where possible to illustrate your arguments and make them more convincing.
General Advice
Work on grammar and spelling to enhance readability and professionalism. Avoid run-on sentences and ensure proper punctuation.
Task Achievement
Consider both views more equally before giving your opinion. Acknowledge the strengths and weaknesses of both sides to develop a more balanced and nuanced argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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