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Some think that teaching children at home is more benefical for their development, while other say they should go to school.discuss the advantages of both views and give your presonal opinion

#think #children #home #development #school
Some people think that children should get their teaching at home for their best growth
while
other
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said
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 that a
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child
 should go to
school
.
This
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talked
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 about the advantages of both views and
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 my personal opinion
at the end
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First,
children
reciving
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receiving
 their education at home has several advantages.
for
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 example a child feels more safe, secure when he is around his parents, which may
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 a positive
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 on the
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 productivity. Another advantage of teaching kids at home is rarely
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face difficult
situation
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 like bullying which
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common
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 issue in the
school
 community.
On the other hand
, children joining
school
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 attractive side.
For example
 ,
school
 is
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the primary
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 place to prepare
childs
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children
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 for social life.They can make friends,
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and relatioship
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relatioship
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relationship
relationships
 and it boosts their social and communication skills.
Furthermore
,
school
 is a strict and systematic place where kids learn to follow the rules and discipline.
To sum up
,
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 would recommend
school
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the school
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 as the best place for teaching that has
bigger
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a bigger
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 effect on the child's growth and improvement .
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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